Talk:The Family Jewels (Marina and the Diamonds album)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 12:31, 6 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hi there! I'm Cartoon network freak and my review for your GAN is going to arrive within this week. Overall, after my first reading of the article, it looks good! Best and until then, Cartoon network freak (talk) 12:31, 6 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

~~studio album by → studio album recorded by~~

collaborated with producers → collaborated with several producers

certified gold → certified Gold

~~and has sold → and has since sold~~
- Not sure about the last one, it could be interpreted as meaning that it sold that many copies after being certified Gold '''tAD''' (talk) 09:33, 8 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Then leave it this way; it's OK also. Cartoon network freak (talk) 19:32, 8 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox

~~The cover needs an alt text~~

Background

~~institutions, and → institutions and~~

began to compose → began composing

playing a variety → playing at a variety

place in the → place on the

of three → of the three

~~said that the title → which title? Do you mean her name?~~
- ~~Done~~

Composition

~~because I'm → because [she is]~~

track "Are You Satisfied?" ponders → add comma before and after the song's name

of the Danish → of Danish

"Girls" that → "

Girls", which

"Girls they never befriend me/'Cause I fall asleep when they speak/Of all the calories they eat" → Add ' instead of " + you need to finish the quote

celebrity → plural

~~and some reviews did not include it. → causing some record reviews not including it.~~

I've reworked this section slightly. I meant "celebrity" as a conceptual noun, like "fame", but I've changed it to "celebrity culture" so that there will be no more misunderstanding. '''tAD''' (talk) 19:50, 8 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Music videos

"I Am Not a Robot", featuring much body glitter. → "I Am Not a Robot", which made use of several body glitter.
- Slightly reworked, "several" is only used for things which can be counted, however '''tAD''' (talk) 17:10, 9 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Try to use other words for "video", not the same
Her father's opinion is pretty unrelevant in this context
Facebook is unreliable; I'm sure you can find another source for it:)

Done

Singles

first single → first single from The Family Jewels
and "Mowgli's Road" was released on 13 November 2009 → with "Mowgli's Road" being premiered on 13 November 2009.
1 February 2010,[1] and reached → Make two sentences out of it
The 26 April is two times there +
Try to use another word for "reached"
single, losing → single, eventually losing

Tour

stating "Next → stating that "next

Critical reception

and Luke → while Luke
only in the titles → remove "the titles"
- Diagree - " ‘Shampain’ – which shares the prize for the album’s worst song name along with ‘Hermit The Frog’ – transcends its duff title and looks straight to Abba, " - they are faulting what the song is called, more than its music '''tAD''' (talk) 17:16, 9 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Gill considered → Gill who considered
You use two times "considered"
and lyrically found → while lyrically founding
match what → match with what
In the review box, the "fairly" is written two times capital and one time not

Done

Commercial performance

certified Gold → certified Gold
and had sold → having sold
certified Gold → as above
The record reached → It reached
Charts, and entered → remove comma
It peaked → The record peaked
138;[59] furthermore → form two sentences here

Track listing

You should hide the EPs as well like the other editions

Charts

Fine

Certifications

Remove "Certified units" and "(with citation)"
- This is how the template appears, see Template:Certification Table Bottom '''tAD''' (talk) 17:20, 9 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Release history

Unlink formats and labels

Outcome: On hold On-hold for 7 days. Besides some words repetitions and few grammar issues, this article is well-written, and you could consider nominating it for FA-status like Electra Heart. Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 16:55, 9 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

All Done

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