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Quality of written expression.

Quality of expression well below wikipedia standard. Looks to be either a machine translation of Japanese text or the work of an ESL speaker. I can make some changes, but there are sections where it's not at all clear what the intended meaning was. Tigerboy1966 (talk) 21:45, 22 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Well, I've had a quick go at improving the English and making the text read more naturally. I've tried to keep to the spirit & sentence order of the original. There was quite a lot of redundancy, so this version is rather shorter than the previous version. The sections on the horse's many nicknames, and his "zaichen" are a bit puzzling. I think I see what the original writer was trying to convey, but I'll do a bit of research before I re-write. Tigerboy1966 (talk) 22:24, 22 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]