Talk:Ollie Watkins/GA1
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Reviewer: 750h+ (talk · contribs) 13:03, 7 March 2024 (UTC)
Hey I’ll review this. This will be my first review, so please bear with me! I’ll look into this soon. 750h+ (talk) 13:03, 7 March 2024 (UTC)
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Lead section
- When it says "winning the EFL Young Player of the Year award, before departing in 2017 for Brentford.", a comma isn't needed. You can change it based on your own opinion. 750h+ (talk) 00:38, 8 March 2024 (UTC)
- "and being named Championship Player of the Year in 2020." I suggest changing it being changed to "named the Championship Player of the Year in 2020" 750h+ (talk) 03:43, 8 March 2024 (UTC)
Early life and education
- "Oliver George Arthur Watkins was born on 30 December 1995 in Torbay Hospital in Torquay, Devon." It should be rephrased to "30 December 1995 at Torbay Hospital in Torquay, Devon." 750h+ (talk) 03:49, 8 March 2024 (UTC)
- Change the section name to "Early life". "Education" isn't necessary since it is a short section. 750h+ (talk) 03:49, 8 March 2024 (UTC)